Pedagogy Postcard #17: Exemplar Essays

A series of short posts about specific elements of teaching practice that I think are effective and make life interesting. Some are based on my own lessons and others are borrowed from lessons I’ve observed.



As a physics teacher I don’t have to deal with essays directly except for A level research coursework.  But I’ve been closely involved with the History department (as line manager), Economics (through a lesson study process) and English (as a result of an extended battle with AQA over marking and post -results appeals – which I blogged about here. ) Essays as products and expressions of learning are the polar opposite to the pieces of visual art or design technology.  In those areas, it’s immediately obvious what has been produced and students and teachers can gain a great deal from discussing specific pieces of work – the skills, the thought processes, the standards, the areas of strength, the areas to improve.  In this post  Lessons from Art Lessons I’ve described  the power of students gathering around in a circle to look at exemplar art pieces as they are being created, not just when they are finished.  But when there is a lot of extended writing, we need a different approach altogether.

As my students are always keen to stress, essay writing is different in different subjects – especially at A level.  A philosophy essay is different to a history essay; an English essay is very different to an economics essay. In getting students to be able to craft high-scoring essays in exam conditions, there’s a lot going on:

  • they need strong subject knowledge in general – the overview of the economics concept, the English text, the episode in history
  • they need to have examples of evidence that can support certain lines of argument – quotations, dates, graphs
  • they need to know the appropriate structure for the essay  in terms of the balance of analysis, evaluation and the number of texts, economic factors, sources that ought to be referenced.  (See my Punter’s Guide to Essay Writing for an attempt to explore this area.)
  • they need to be able to apply all this knowledge to a specific question, not just trot out a rehearsed set of arguments that don’t deal with the issue in hand, and to do it to time.

This is no mean task especially if we are trying to blend the assessment with the appreciation of the content in a motivating and effective manner – as discussed in Pedagogy Postcard #12.

Using exemplar essays is an excellent way to allow students to see how all of this is done in practice.  Just as I’ve been drafting this post,  Chris Curtis has produced  a superb blog about teaching students how to write with a certain tone in English.  This is an excellent example of using exemplar writing as a stimulus for learning. He produces his own writing and shares it with students – for them to emulate and surpass with their own.  It’s carefully crafted to highlight the learning points in hand.  Christopher Waugh has a lot of exemplar material on the Edutronic_net site for his English department including student work that sets a standard as in this example of a Y10 Theme Study.  Using exemplars is obviously a routine part of teaching how to write essays.

What I’ve observed is that the best value from using exemplars comes from investing time in analysing them fully.  It takes time to read them; it takes a longer time to then evaluate them and extract the learning that students can apply to their own writing.  This can be done badly – if the essays are waved around just to look at visually or if multiple essays are passed around for a cursory glance  or made into displays that students never look at closely.  To properly explore an exemplar so it acts as a beacon, shining light on the path to success, is something that needs to be done slowly.

In the Lesson Study process I’ve been supporting with two Economics teachers at KEGs, this has been the focus.  In the first cycle  – described in this post about our Lesson Study on AS Essay-writing – we had some partial success with using exemplar essays but felt that we could improve the lesson still further.  Recently, we ran the second cycle and it proved to be much more effective. Essentially, the process was this:

  • To discuss the topic as a whole and then to focus on one specific question – something that often comes up in the exam.
  • For students to write their own mark scheme, referencing the exam board criteria, but putting the points in the order of a typical essay structure
  • The following lesson to give students an hour to read two contrasting scripts from previous external exams.
An exemplar script from a previous Y12 student.  It contains some obvious errors as well as some good material.
An exemplar script from a previous Y12 student. It contains some obvious errors as well as some good material.
  • to discuss and agree the marks they should receive using their own mark schemes; then to compare with the real mark scheme and to have a discussion once the official marks were reveals.
  • In the third lesson to write a similar essay of their own under timed conditions.

This emailed feedback from one of the students gives a flavour of their perspective on it:

Feedback from one of the students involved in the Economics Lesson Study
Feedback from one of the students involved in the Economics Lesson Study


The outcomes from the students’ own essays were very strong. They’d learned a lot from the process.  The key points seem to be this:

  • Ask students to consider the standards required before reading the exemplars – asking them to write their own mark scheme is just one way to do this.
  • Be explicit about structure versus content especially in relation to exam board preferences which can be quite idiosyncratic.
  • Give them a good amount of time to read the exemplars properly all the way through.
  • Use at least two contrasting exemplars – not just a perfect one or a flawed on.  In practice, students often find that it s only by comparing two exemplars that they can see the difference in standards.  One exemplar essay on its own is hard to engage with but students can say more easily than this is better than that. 
  • Make the exemplars as close in subject matter to the exact essay question that students have to write themselves; as the student explains above, it’s not  easy to transfer the generic features of one exemplar to another question entirely – at least not at first.
  • When ready, ask them to write under time constraints – even if more time is given initially than they’d get in the exam.  Too often students produce well-crafted essays at home that they can’t reproduce in exams.






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